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Vudoo4u2 · 06-14-2009, 04:16 AM

been working on this one for a little bit...let me know what you guys think

jhv · 06-14-2009, 05:44 AM

nice composition! however, theres this like black object under the long bench on the left. my eye keeps wandering there. also, theres a white object in the tree line in the center which also distracts me a bit

Vudoo4u2 · 06-14-2009, 06:44 AM

I 100% agree, solid tips

I have updated the orig pic above

jhv · 06-14-2009, 08:10 AM

perfect

BillLee · 06-14-2009, 09:13 AM

wow i like it. i would buy this and hang it on my wall. do you have a non-black and white version?

rodi · 06-14-2009, 10:30 AM

i'd like it better horizontal. my eyes keep wondering to the extreme top and bottom searching for something more interesting than the center.

i'd try a natural horizontal orientation and step in much closer. at least throw in the assertion that the viewer is actually there.

Vudoo4u2 · 06-14-2009, 07:52 PM

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Originally Posted by rodi

i'd like it better horizontal. my eyes keep wondering to the extreme top and bottom searching for something more interesting than the center.

i'd try a natural horizontal orientation and step in much closer. at least throw in the assertion that the viewer is actually there.

Id go the horizontal route...found the scene distracting side ways however, and I think ill be hard pressed to find two random people sitting in those chairs again

I was standing back sniping away for this one

forza1976 · 06-14-2009, 08:09 PM

I'd put more focus on the ground and it's texture or perhaps the sky, I'm just not sure what you are driving my eyes to focus on. It's a great shot but the horizon in the middle is just catching my eye, shift it up just an inch or so...

Love b/w shots!

dosserj · 06-16-2009, 08:43 AM

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Originally Posted by forza1976

I'd put more focus on the ground and it's texture or perhaps the sky, I'm just not sure what you are driving my eyes to focus on. It's a great shot but the horizon in the middle is just catching my eye, shift it up just an inch or so...

Love b/w shots!

My thoughts exactly. The foreground texture is great and those clouds look menacing. I would have liked to see more of the clouds shifting the horizon to the lower third. Regardless, great shot!

jhv · 06-16-2009, 10:22 AM

i think the image works best as is; the sky and ground are nearly divided 50/50 by the treeline and lake. the two people drew my attention immediately and i dont think they wouldnt stand out as much if the image was horizontal

UdubBadger · 06-17-2009, 12:54 AM

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Originally Posted by rodi

i'd like it better horizontal. my eyes keep wondering to the extreme top and bottom searching for something more interesting than the center.

i'd try a natural horizontal orientation and step in much closer. at least throw in the assertion that the viewer is actually there.

I agree...

I'd also like to see a bit more contrast too... try a stronger curve maybe?

maybe something along the lines of this? (ps don't hate me for editing your pic).

TWiTCHY · 06-17-2009, 01:05 AM

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Originally Posted by UdubBadger

I agree...

I'd also like to see a bit more contrast too... try a stronger curve maybe?

maybe something along the lines of this? (ps don't hate me for editing your pic).

I like.

ohaywood · 06-19-2009, 12:39 AM

I think I see a water bottle on the farthest right bench; I would clone that out if I were you. I'd also do some more burning/vignette on the top and bottom to bring the focus in a little closer on the subject.

Anyway, the picture is great as it is

well done.

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jhv Lieutenant General 1699 Rep 17,304 Posts Drives: G80 M3 Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Los Angeles iTrader: (1)	nice composition! however, theres this like black object under the long bench on the left. my eye keeps wandering there. also, theres a white object in the tree line in the center which also distracts me a bit
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jhv Lieutenant General 1699 Rep 17,304 Posts Drives: G80 M3 Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Los Angeles iTrader: (1)	i think the image works best as is; the sky and ground are nearly divided 50/50 by the treeline and lake. the two people drew my attention immediately and i dont think they wouldnt stand out as much if the image was horizontal
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